Sharp Object
There was once a king who had the gift of a son
and he went to a monk to get the young prince’s destiny. The monk told him “The
prince destiny is to die by the edge of a sharp object.”
The
father of the boy went fourth and locked the boy in an underground room
underneath his palace. In the kings eyes this would be the safest spot from any
enemies who would try to do the boy harm. In time the king set fourth for the
monk to come and teach the young prince.
In
time the young prince grew old and the time to take a wife had come. So the
prince had yet to leave the underground room where he lived most of his life.
The king had made arrangement to have his son marry the daughter of a neighboring
king. The wedding day came and the prince finally left his protected room to
live life.
There
the prince stood at the alter facing the woman he was to wed. There he stared
at the woman who was so fine and fair. Her skin glistened in the sun, her eyes
as blue as the ocean and her hair as gold as the sun. There the young prince
fell madly in love.
They
the went on their honeymoon to enjoy there selves being alone and together
under the protection of the princess’s father. Little did the young prince know
that young princess had men who would kill to be the suitor of his now wife. On
the last night of their honeymoon the prince the princess went out for a stroll
along the ocean. The moonlight reflected off the water making it glisten. The
moment was perfect for the both of them who were madly in love. Toward the end
of their stroll two men ambushed them and stabbed the young prince seven times
in the back with a golden dagger.
The
two men then took off and left the dagger and the young prince lying dead along
with the unharmed princess. Once the sun rose up the caretakers of the princess
came looking for her and found her lying there with the dead prince. So goes
the story of the young prince who was to die by a sharp object.
Authors notes: The story
that inspired this story was “The Story of the Wolf-Bride” found in the book Persian Tales by D.L.R. Lorimer and E.O. Lorimer (1919).
I kept a lot of the details the same as the original story. However, I changed
the characters by adding a king and the young prince. In the end I wanted to
show that no matter what, the destiny of the young prince was to die by a sharp
object whether it is a dagger or a sword. This is sort of a saying that many
people have in real life, which would be “If it’s meant to be then its mean to
be.” So this story shows what it is like when something that is going meant to happen
just happen such as a motorcycle accident. A person who first gets their
motorcycle is bound to get into an accident because of human error. Whether it
is a major or minor accident depends on the person and the situation. The point
to it is that regardless of anything it will happen. I believe this is what the
story is trying to tell the reader. The moral of this story is something that
is interesting because although it may seem negative it is partially true.
(A golden dagger)
Hey Angel! I thought you did a good job of adapting the original story. It read exactly like a traditional fairy tale! I think the best scene was when you described the prince seeing his bride for the very first time. I could really picture what was happening. I look forward to reading more of your stories throughout the semester!
ReplyDeleteGreat retelling of the original story. I read the original one, but after reading yours, I saw how much details you added. From the bride to the ocean water, great use of details! I saw some grammar/punctuation mistakes, but it's nothing a double check won't fix. Overall, you did a great job in wording and retelling the story! Way to go!!
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed your version of the story. I think the king and the prince added more entertainment to the plot of the story. It showed that disasters even happen to people that are in the highest power. I thought you did a good job of applying the picture of the golden dagger. It really gives the audience a good visual of the murder weapon.
ReplyDeleteHi Angel! I had not read the original story before reading your version, but I would like to say great job! You kept the story simple in nature, and didn't give away then when of when the prince's death would happen. The only suggestion I would make to do a quick grammar check before publishing your story. I.e., look out for commas, apostrophes, and the like. But good job all around!
ReplyDeleteHi Angel! I liked your story and thought it was really clever that the king kept his son locked up underground to prevent the prophecy from coming true. I also liked that someone trying to steal the princess's love stabbed the young prince and fulfilled the prophecy. Your story definitely made me want to read the original story and see what happened!
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